My Planet Writing

Create and Describe Your Own Planet -

Description writing task

Term 2 Weeks 5-6

Purpose of this piece of writing is to:

Learning Intentions

I am learning to use language features to make my
writing interesting and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.

I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features to make
my writing interesting and engaging
(simile, metaphor, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some topic specific words
to include in my writing.

-I have used some Te Reo Māori

Focus

We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are writing a
descriptive piece of writing to promote your imaginary planet. You aim is to convince
people to move to your planet. You want your writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what
it is like on your planet.

First, we will look at an excerpt of a video describing the moon from the Avatar movie.
Click here to get to video= Pandora.

Second, we will discuss together what you will need in your work to
make it successful and look at how to plan our work. Then you will plan your work and check
with a teacher before you start writing.

Third, do your piece of writing.

Fourth, complete you piece of writing. Remember to proof-read
(check spelling and punctuation) and edit (does it make sense? do you need to change any sentences?)
yourself and with a buddy and fill in your self and peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.

My Writing

BlueWaterina is planet in the rex glandon solar system. It is next to Oceanoraus.

It is a giant terrestrial planet.  

The weather is good and it gets

up to  45 degrees celsius in the water and in spring. It gets hotter in summer.
Sometimes there are little tornadoes in the water so you evacuate the water
straight away otherwise the fish get mad and make a whirlpool and they send
you back to Australia.

To get there, first, you have to go to the Little Sandy Desert in Australia.
Then you have to find an old golden key in the white sand by a gecko hole.
Then you have to find another golden key near the gecko hole. Then you put
the two golden keys inside the gecko hole and you turn as small as a gecko.
Then a little slide appears out of lots of mist and you have to slide down the
slide and you fall into a elevator with lots of colourful fish on the outside and it
takes 5 minutes to get there. Then when you get there you will fall out of the sky.

In BlueWaterina there are lots of colourful creatures.
There is also walking fish and swimming birds.
There is lots of reptiles including drocodiles ( dragon and crocodile).
There is also a unieel (unicorn and eel) with a blue and white horn and lives
in the water and swims after colourful fish.

You can go there for a holiday and you can go there to swim all day and
you can go to the top of a enormous lighthouse with rima (five)
thousand steps. At the top of the lighthouse there is an aquarium filled with fish.

By Summer F